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    The Notorious E.N.G. Engivale's Avatar
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    Everybody Knows...

    Everybody Knows...




    The Modern Man's got a plan and he's sure of it,
    He stopped trying to find where his mind and his courage hid,
    Even the Purest Kid will be stained with the blood,
    ashamed of his love and the pain in his brain he blames on the drug.
    The issues aren't new, they're the same as before,
    we're trainin' the poor to make soliders to feel the pain of the war,
    We accept as a fact of life what wouldn't be if we had the sight
    to see we could change it but noone acts ; we don't think that we have the right...
    So we go to our jobs through this world of hoses and knobs,
    spiders, roaches & frogs and writers, dopeheads & slobs,
    bad drivers, cynics and unapproachable snobs,
    people that can't even cry when they try to cope with a loss...
    We can't even say what we feel, It's as if the day isn't real,
    we'd rather pretend it's a dream than scream and fall prey to the Meal,
    This clicking I hear is just the noise as I type,
    my choice is to write about my regret --- the poison of life...

    We condemn the atrocities in addendums and glossaries,
    like the Men Metastophales sentenced at the end like apostrophes.
    But what we disapprove of we make no effort to stop,
    we do nothing instead of giving something better a shot...
    It's what doesn't resist when parents give up on their kids,
    it's when you just say "Fuck it," when you know someone's at risk.
    It's when there's no love in a kiss and it's just a Tradition,
    it's alone with two kids because her husband's in prison...
    And all of these policies and personal properties
    are just words on a paper so why don't you follow these?
    All these Idolatries and rules you obey are just
    Around what's inside you like pie through a layered crust,
    You'd watch with concern while people got put on crosses to burn,
    If you stayed quiet while they died what could you possibly learn?
    Their ashes tossed in an urn, they screamed for help and you didn't,
    when you fail to act it's not good feelin' responsible, Is it?

    I'm cheated of justice, it's unfair and I'm bleeding from cut wrists,
    I keep searching for the answer and then it finally just clicks,
    My mind is the substance, what's behind it is me -
    what I think has nothing to do with what I'll finally be,
    But by design that I see it, my eyes close and the lie's clothed,
    it's a hidden agenda, you find it and then the surprise blows,
    Everything's out of proportion, I see the Four Horsemen,
    Plague and Wrath just play and laugh with your foreskin,
    We walk through our daily lives like bees in a maze of hives,
    And even if we ever found our way would we stay disguised?
    I guess I accept that I'll be dead before I ever die,
    I'll stop caring about everything and suffer but never cry,
    I'll just be smiling for show, I'll just be talking to talk,
    I'll be the guy waiting to leave and watching the clock,
    I used to think I wanted love and peace, not World War 3,
    and if we saw the end of it all - would we even tell the story?




    "Our lives begin to end the day we become silent about the things that matter." - Martin Luther King



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    I'm cheated of justice, it's unfair and I'm bleeding from cut wrists,
    I keep searching for the answer and then it finally just clicks,
    My mind is the substance, what's behind it is me -
    what I think has nothing to do with what I'll finally be,
    But by design that I see it, my eyes close and the lie's clothed,
    it's a hidden agenda, you find it and then the surprise blows,


    sick man.. felt this mainly whole way through, just, this part stood out... nice rymes man...

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    o we go to our jobs through this world of hoses and knobs,
    spiders, roaches & frogs and writers, dopeheads & slobs,
    bad drivers, cynics and unapproachable snobs,
    people that can't even cry when they try to cope with a loss...

    Fire. This whole drop was interesting, made me keep wanting to read on.
    Some spots seemed a tad stretched, but overall this was exceptional.

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    heh, this was cool. so this was old? don't remember reading it. I forget a lot of things though so I might've even left feed on it before heh... I really thought it was kind've dope though. the quote works well with it, and sort've goes to show for the way things are... dunno, it's a real hard hitting piece as far as an outlook on the nature of people go... just a real deep piece... you got some good lines littered throughout this beast too... I'll get me some quotables... hold up...

    My mind is the substance, what's behind it is me -
    what I think has nothing to do with what I'll finally be,
    But by design that I see it, my eyes close and the lie's clothed,
    it's a hidden agenda, you find it and then the surprise blows,
    Everything's out of proportion, I see the Four Horsemen,
    Plague and Wrath just play and laugh with your foreskin,
    We walk through our daily lives like bees in a maze of hives,
    And even if we ever found our way would we stay disguised?


    ^that was REAL dope... the flow was insanity lol... and you just had a lot of good imagrey there... the bees and hives line was really dope... and the pie crust line earlier in the piece was really cool too... but like I said, you had a lot of cool lines like that throughout... definitely worth the second read if I read it before lol. good stuff eng...




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    Engivale, it's good to see posting in here again.
    It must be legends week cause we've got you BTK and Chris Black posting.

    Now onto your peice.
    I like how you were very creative in your writing, using very strong lines to get your points across. Your flow throughout was very well done, it's a shame your not in SS anymore because your always going to be a dominating force in this writing game.
    Overall I have absolutly nothing bad to say about your peice it was just a strong creative filled peice. Your vocabulary was top notch and I must say I was highly impressed.

    We condemn the atrocities in addendums and glossaries,
    like the Men Metastophales sentenced at the end like apostrophes.
    But what we disapprove of we make no effort to stop,
    we do nothing instead of giving something better a shot...
    It's what doesn't resist when parents give up on their kids,
    it's when you just say "Fuck it," when you know someone's at risk.
    Just simply amazing, and deep. I love this area of your writing even though your entire peice was amazing that stuck out to me.

    If you could Engivale, I would love to have you feed my recent drop.
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    Re: Everybody Knows...

    Really nice work, Eng...

    Tight, deep kinda soul-searching rhyme.
    Pretty flawless on format, scheme...everything flowed like water.
    You lost me a couple of times in content, but that's just cuz the shit's real long and I'm kinda high right now...

    Don't really know what else to say...you know your work is dope...and this is no different.
    The most vicious of your rhymes in this piece...

    We condemn the atrocities in addendums and glossaries,
    like the Men Metastophales sentenced at the end like apostrophes.


    I haven't read your opponent's shit yet, but I'm betting he just got his ass kicked.

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    Re: Everybody Knows...

    I dug this Eng. I`d like to see more from you. But we know how ur all pro-audio now lol. I really like these kinda pieces. It had it`s own character. But the content always make you think of yourself in the situation. And you did that nicely. The piece definitely had quite a few wow moments that stood out. And it carried along to the end nicely. Flow was crisp.

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    I liked the feel at the beginning. Everyone feel that, almost like the narrator in Fight Club before Tyler Durden appeared.

    it's when you just say "Fuck it," when you know someone's at risk.
    It's when there's no love in a kiss and it's just a Tradition
    I absolutely loved that second line there. This was a little hit-and-miss for me though, just because sometimes the rhymes seemed to be there just to rhyme. That was only a couple spots. It's not the illness you dropped on Daz, but it's still was a nice read.

    Oh, and you better beat that RM guy, you whore.


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    Engivale, Engivale, Engivale... I leave the site, come back, and notice you've become a Legendary Member... you goddamn son of a bitch. How u been?

    anyways... This piece had so many things i can quote that i'm too lazy to point them all out. But trust me, i liked all the shit that the other people here have already told u they like and more. I love your rhyme-scheme and how smooth the piece is... i can tell u put so much thought and effort into your pieces and this one is no different... there were no flaws and everything written and the way it was written was necessary... no filler at all. The overall concept didn't surprise me... u usually know how to describe humans and their feelings and different situations in everyday life and u do it so well. Even though i would like to read something from you that is more creative and original (u kno, something not so obviously deep-seeming), this shit was dope and ur really good at what u do.

    v/Engivale lol


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    Re: Everybody Knows...

    thx for the feed, guys, I'll drop RTF's later 2nite... just upping, it's the only time I'll do it.

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